He Comes in Dreams
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Press below to hear me read this poem.
In the corner of my room
In shadows, you await the moon
Poetry swirls in my mind, as the veil descends
One world fades and dies, as one is born
Silently beneath the sea of sheets, you slip
Weightless over my toes, ankles, calves
You trace a line of intent
Shallows and depths to be explored
Excited recognition in me stirs
Anticipation of your touch
Hands schooled by eons yet still curious
Delving, searching, finding
Fingertips awaken skin
Effervescent with the promise
Alert and conscious every nerve
Waiting, wanting, writhing
Warm and liquid beckons
Weight and heat answers
My aching hunger feasts
Gripping, arching, moaning
Rolling silver swells in rhythm
Break against the shore
Waves crash, flesh quivers
Pulsing, panting, spent
Left heavy and still, washed upon the sand
Back into the night you fade, my phantom paramour
I was inspired by Frieda Babbley's poem Soft and Delicious and then Cris A's Foreplay
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I'm glad you liked it Cris. I don't know your "little earthquakes" sounded like a happing ending. Or was that just the beginning?
Okay, if you should ask LOL the serpent lies motionless, before it makes its kill. hence the little eartquakes are heartbeats that should be quelled lest the surprise is denied the prey. suffice to say, the surprise is the bigger earthquakes :D
Oooooh, I am educated and now curious. I will wait for your second installment then Cris.
I'm a bit out of breath after reading this, Randy. But in a good way, you know what I mean? :-)
Yes I do! Once you've got your breathing down, you can go for multiple reads.
How about me, Randy? Are you waiting for an installment from me? I give good installment! (Ok, ok, sorry. Couldn't resist!)
Very nice and titillating poem with great imagery and provocative language. If I had to pick a favorite line, it would be "warm and liquid beckons." Delicious!
Christoph I'll take an installment from you. It doesn't have to poetry, as long as its juicy!
Randy, this is wonderfully sensual and steamy! Anticipation of a touch is probably the most intense feeling. My favorite line is "Hands schooled by eons yet still curious. The entire poem is lovely. :)
So did you write this for your Dr. Soft Hands? *wink* I'm still waiting for his number. ;)
Anticipation is the absolute best. :) I'm glad you liked it! And no, its not for my Dr. If I had this kind of crush on him, I'd have a really hard time putting my feet in the stirrups. Or would that be, way to easy of a time?
Nicely done, nice imagery and sensory stuff. Very much enjoyed
Thanks Tom. I reworked it after reading some of yours, to get a better rhythm going. I write poetry by instinct but I should probably study up on it. Glad you enjoyed it.
Your instinct seems to be working absolutely fabulously, but poetry is fun to read, so why the hell not?
With dreams like those who would ever want to get out of bed???
Randy, love it!
Thanks for the word "fabulously" Tom.
@sharrie69 - Seriously, huh? And if I could teach my Paramour to bring me coffee in bed I wouldn't need a man! Thanks for coming by Sharrie.
Thank you Marco. :)
and get him to wash the dishes too while you're at it ;-)
Now you're talking about my real "dream" man! LOL.
I don't even smoke.....but I think I need a cigarette!!!
wow, omigod, jeez
I see this place is just full of lust!!!
R.Blue thanks for stopping in. The smokers are all out on the patio.
Cindy, yep thats the reaction I was going for.
Golden Boy, lust is as thick in here as Aunt Jemima's syrup.
Randy, love it! very nice hub
Thanks Lgali.
Oh cheers Randy, get me bloody randy, you are a minxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh, where is the fan, things are getting hot around here..........
A minx am I? Perhaps so, but doesn't that make you a Bad Boy in my company.
Did I get you over heated BP, oh good.
How about a 4some??? we'll have BC's galley wench prepare the ship...mudring...some plastic sheets and a gallon or two of KY..his and hers. BP will bring her bunny sabre.
Ah Blue, are you feeling left out?
No...just left too early yesterday....really like this guy BC...he seems to fit right in with our naughty clan. I've made him my wingman.
Ya, he seems like good people. :)
Sometimes I cum in my dreams as well.
I thought for a millisecond of spelling that way. LOL. Would have given away the happy ending though. :)
This is beautiful! Especially:
"Silently beneath the sea of sheets, you slip
Weightless over my toes, ankles, calves
You trace a line of intent
Shallows and depths to be explored"
And the photo is perfect!
Hi Kelsey! I like to see different peoples favorite lines it tells a little about them I think. Ya I lucked out with that photo huh?,
"Hands schooled by eons yet still curious"
You might have titled this "Incubus". A somewhat darker take.
Or Vampire Lover?
That could work.
ok, back to see what the wife is up to again bbl....Great work Randy
When your done with "the wife" come back and tell me what you think. Until then I'll be satisfied with great... ya great works for me.
Anticipation is the best part. Okay, well maybe not the BEST part, but it's up there.
LM, I wrote that very thing on another hub today. Its a close 2nd, 3rd, and 4th for me. :)
Great minds think alike, then.
I've never really sat down to rate it all, but first is a given. :-)
Umbuwabba!
I was hoping to wite something much wittier and elegant than that, but all the blood has left my brain!
Just WOW! - Intense heat!
I love to have that effect. :) Glad you liked it.
Thats def. a friday night poem
those are difficult to do but its right there in black and white a true blue friday nighter
What makes them difficult to do J? Can't keep your hands on the keyboard?
I loved the part:
"Rolling silver swells in rhythm
Break against the shore
Waves crash,flesh quivers
Pulsing,panting,spent"
It reminds me of 2 huge waves of water of equal size crashing against echother and ending up to nothing so that it blends in with the rest of the sea,or how you can take a positive number and a negative number of the same number and make it 0.The ending result: priceless,effortless,so easily done like a second nature.Im not a big fan of numbers but what you said in your poem is like a mathematic equasion.Solving the probelm is really not that hard like some people think,all you ever needed to know was the formula in order to solve the probelm.
Translation=
once you master the formula of love,you can solve just about anything thats in that category.
Very nicely done randy:)
Hangin 10, thanks for leaving such a thoughtful comment. Its fun for me to "see" the pictures my words create in other peoples minds. Great fun.
Nah although lately i could see it being true
but friday night is this pub on the outskirts of london and if you read there and you don't bring quality the self proclaimed experts will heckle you till you hate your work yourself and england haha, but youd do just fine with this one in front of the firing squad
Oh goodness. I could never read my stuff out loud in front of human beings! I'm too shy for that, and would be devastated if anyone disapproved.
Randy B,
Love this poem, and the way you play with the movement and paradox, and the opposites...and the sea metaphor...and the painting.
Will go read your other hubs, just got here:)
Rina, Thanks for coming by and thank you for the thoughtful comment. I do love a good metaphor; bit of a metaphor whore actually.
I was reading and gasping rapidly. My mouth felt dry and my hands were so sweat!!!!! Will call my girfriend now :)
Shamel, Glad to get the party started :)
I think this is my absolute favorite :)
Ya, its one of my favorites too. My first naughty one.
loved the picture and the colours, and the poem of course
Ya Brenda I was lucky to find that cool picture.
Oh how I do love a good orgasm metaphore. More anytime please - Thank you
Lol, I'll see what I can do Lisa. :)
So, I read it, I took a cold shower and I'm back. Someone with eon of experience would only be curious about something (someone) really special! the biggest sexual organ may be the skin,but, the most powerful is the mind. You stoked the fire of a lot of minds with this one...Eddie
I do love to stoke fires. I really, really do. :)
Hey Randy,
Wow, first poem anyone's ever written about me. haha
But seriously, I like your choice of participles. Anyone ever tell you that? "Hey baby, nice participles." Good ol' dirty verbs. You're my kinda poet.
Later alligator
Greetings Arthur, thanks for coming in for a read. No, you are the first to compliment me on my participles. And now I wonder why no one has commented on them before. I obviously have better than average participles and I know how to use them! Thanks for noticing ;)
I'm in awe. Such expressive mind pictures. The compliments that I want to share are to lackluster to be worth sharing. Only one thing. To call it naughty does it an injustice. It is too beautiful to be so referred. It gives me some inkling of what it is like for a sensitive woman. It should help a man be a more sensitive man.
Oh don't be put off David, please. Naughty is so much more fun than squeaky clean. Explain what you mean by an "inkling of what it is like for a sensitive woman." Not that I'm doubting you. Just didn't know I was one.
Well, that's one that gets the heart rate up a bit! I'll just head down and get my nails done now! WB
A cowboy with a manicure, interesting image. Ranching doesn't make for soft hands and now that I've had the soft hands of white collar on me, I must say I prefer them.
Eloquent and powerful. A nice counterweight to the other piece you listed on your profile page. I was not sure what to expect and I was not disappointed! I love well written poetry where ideas, actions, love, pain, sadness, etc. all are painted with words not necessarily related to the topic. Going back over them, I only note moaning and paramour as directly related to your focus. That is magnificent writing. You reveal beauty and passion where too many today cheapen it with tawdry words and images. Thank you for sharing another extremely well written piece.
Well thanks Michael. I don't think this is my strongest poem on hp but it is the first on this subject matter I ever wrote. There have been many, many since then :)
Steamy! :)
Great write I was rolling on the crests of your waves.
Oops Tom, don't know how I missed you! Thanks.
Hi Sligobay. I hope you enjoyed the ride.
Haha NICE
You commented mine so I visited your page to find THIS lovely piece.
Sultry, Sexy, Seductive, Sensual.
Appetizing and alluring. ;]
Brilliant work.
Oh I'm glad you approve. I'm especially glad you used the word appetizing.
* Nom Nom, Chomp Chomp *
I'm thinking passionate weightless effervescent writhing love is the best kind.
I am totally in love..:} (and considering a new avocation as a phantom paramour).
Very nice read of a well crafted experience...
Hi bbnix nice to meet you! Phantom paramour work is a good gig if you can get it ;)
Thanks Randy. Nice to meet you as well. I'm quite good at spontaneously choosing new professions that are extremely challenging and most often traumatic, but the rewards are to die for...and I always follow my heart!
Go read my Play With Me, you might want to consider the saxophone as well :D
I will and I love the sax...
in the corner of the room, under the leering moon; i am all creamy in the middles. :) CC
Are you a twinkie Charlie?
Hahaha in moments like this, yes. a real treat deep fried. with red raspberry sauce. today i am raw meat and why are you up so early? nevermind. x
Two weeks since I first met you and a revisit most adored. You've taken me quite by surprise, still, your Phantom Paramour. Truly a gift of a writer you are our dear Randy, and just so you know, you still play that sax like no other to stir this man's core...;)
You make us all feel like twinkies I think =}
CC I just hadn't gone to bed yet. ;)
Hi BB, all men are treats.
I'm hitting the shower. A cold one. Very cool imagery. Rated up.....
Heeheee. Glad you liked it.
That was impressive, I usually gauge poetry by how quickly it makes me see a picture in my mind of whatever it's trying to describe, this piece brought enough vivid imagery for a whole Audrey Hepburn marathon into my head...It had a great flow to it as well.
Oh goody I gave you mind pictures; thats better than goose bumps. Although I endeavor to give those as well.
I didn't see pictures, I had my eyes closed... The arching back brought me over the edge, too. But of course, it wasn't me - I wouldn't have DREAMED of fading away...
LOL, flying fish. Yea, I don't think phantom lovers are allowed to watch the sun come up... says so in their rule book.
amzing I just love it! love the rythem of it very good! youre very good
Well thank you RoseAsauresRex! I so glad you liked it.
Your welcome! i enjoy reading your poems they're very beautiful
I just posted another 60 seconds ago, but its not in the same family as this one :)
Darn it, Randy. I was half asleep and you woke me up. Sigh. Thanks, I guess. Great poem. Voted up and pleasant dreams.
I specialize in sweet dreams and good mornings Q.
Well I could use some service. I'm sitting in an empty house and drinking a martini gone wild, all by myself.
Hmmmm all of a sudden I'm thirsty.
So glad you recommended this hub in your bio. What a sensual adventure!
Nice to meet you Sally! Glad you enjoyed it.
Wow , this is so well written , you nailed it! I love the style of your written expressions. I think you know men!
I wouldn't presume to know men at all! I just write what I feel and I'm glad you approve.
passion at its bes...nice
and you should give the octain a try...smiles
i meant "best" of course..
I did Claudia you saw what happened :P
Mysterious lover...I can dig it.
Mmmmmm, me too.
I love this..you write what the rest of us do not have the nerve to write but would love too:)
Glad you liked it Cindy. Its easy to do when you're hiding behind an alter ego :)
Wow, so intense and so carnal! There were so many great lines in this piece but my favorite has to be:
"You trace a line of intent
Shallows and depths to be explored"
What a great phrase. This was awesome and I voted it that way. Wonderful job.
Thank you Poetic Fool. What a lovely comment.
Sensational and sweet. Provoking and intense poem. Good work pal
Thank you sir, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Inspirational; sophisticated edginess; distant memories re-visited. Thank you.
Hi Ciarriadh! Thanks for the comment :)
Cris A Level 2 Commenter 3 years ago
RB
I see you've gone an extra notch from where my poem stopped. And you took it all the way home! If I may quote Frieda's poem, this is quite "soft and delicious". Lovely :D
Btw, love the art above, it sets the mood :D