Hi, How Are You?
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I’m fine, and you?
They say they saw you with a girl
At once I’m elated and sad
A forgiving heart remembers joy
Forgets the eggshells my daily tread
At the ring encircling me, I stare
I notice yours is no longer there
I’m fine and you?
Have you talked to our advisor
Have you figured out what to do
A second job, lose the house
Is it written down a kind of plan
Doesn’t seem fair the way it was drawn
How much, how bad, how long
I’m fine and you?
Your daughter cried again today
And no he didn’t miss you
Its Daddy’s turn he said
They want to stay another night
Lots of sugar cereal and all day tv
Its all rules and vegetables with me
I’m fine and you?
They are back there biding their time
Lapping at the top of the dam
Waiting for the drop that sends it over
I heard about your Dad, its really serious
Have you seen him, he’s the color of this paint
But I’m ok with it either way, live or die
Will you excuse me please, I need to cry.
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I love it Randy. It says so much, really tells the story. It's crummy to be the one with the rules and the vegetables. You should be proud of this!
Very nice and very sad. Been there also. Can relate. Thanks, Randy
Beautifully written. I wonder if my mom felt that way. I suppose she must have, but there wouldn't have been conversation, and we had vegetables at my dad's house too.
From pain there is art, from art there is life, and from life their is pain...again. What a life we live; the one within, and the one without. "I am fine, how are you?" *Screaming inside* I love this Randy.
ralwus, Maybe that's my problem I'm a tear fighter. If I would just cry my eyes out, I'd be done with it? I'm glad you're still with us.
Thanks Chris. I kept trying to avoid writing this one but it all kinda came to a head today. I had to get it out of my head, ya know?
alekhouse thanks for reading. I guess these feelings are universal, although I wouldn't wish them on anyone.
Frieda, thanks for commenting. I think all parents feel they are judged against each other.
Trooper, Admittedly some of the best poetry comes from pain, but other extreme emotions produce great pieces too. Like lust and love. I'd like to write from the perspective of falling in love for a change.
Screamin' on the inside is right.
This is so sad and frustrating Randy :( You made almost react...
Shamel, what do you mean? React how?
aw I feel for you...... nicely written I have to say..... you have talent, maybe I already said that, but it is true.....
Thanks for the lovely compliment Brenda.
You've covered a difficult and painful topic very well. Well done!
Thanks Cindy! Thanks for reading.
Sorry for the late reply. You almost pulled a tear from me. This is a tragic one which forced a sigh out of me.
A daughter (7 years old) of a friend had to do a story on "my parents" in school. She wrote "My daddy is my favorite toy. My mommy cleans the toilets." Kids will always take the "toy" over the chores. Be the "toy" for a while.. the veggies can wait.
Shamel, almost? I'll try harder next time. Like the new avatar :)
Hi Candie, now that summer is here I'm more the fun Mom. But still, I want to be the favorite all the time... selfish.
As they grow, they will know, Randy.. its just a game to them,
Thanks Hawkes. Ya, they think its camping.
Aw Randy... I agree with Cindy. This covers a difficult and painful topic really well. (I'm fine thanks, you?)
Randy, I can sooo relate to this poem! I have been there. It is truly a cutting time, for sure! ((big hug)). You are an amazing poet! :)
marco, thanks for coming by and commenting.
Invictus, I thought these were personal trials but it seems they are universal. Thanks for the compliment.
Wow, this hurt which just shows how very well you write.
Art from pain Russ.
(( hugs ))
Let me know if you want my advice and perspective....otherwise looks like you have it under control.
Thanks CG.
Thanks Blue, I just needed to get it down on paper, control returns.
Randy, this one is so sad. I love that I can read about your fierceness in sex and love, bodies and heat...then you completely floor me with something like this one. What are you trying to do to me?
Brilliant!
AIDY- I had to clean out my closet, so to speak. Hard to write the fun stuff with a bunch of negative crap in my brain.
you done good, Randy. I enjoyed every word.
rated up for expression :)
Well thank you much.
What a sad poem,yet its so beautiful because it is filled with such emotion. Keep hanging in there and never stop writing. Also be sure to read some of my poetry when you get a chance.
Real life is often sad... I try not to go there often :)
yeah, off with the excess baggage! :D
Do you find Cris, that if you write about it, it dissipates?
Wow... such a raw essence... like the pain follows the lines, transmitting itself, it's news, beyond. Powerful piece.
a very honest write on the feelings when two parents are not on the same page...whether seperated or not...it can really jack the kids up too...great emotion, think i would cry as well...
from the comments, does it dissipate, no...but maybe you are another step down the road of understanding
"eggshells my daily tread" —novel infusion of popular phrases there. Very honest piece. Nice capture of a powerful disconnect through your words.
so sad and such a lot of pain, trying to appear ok on the outside and inside all is burnt...good capture of these feelings randy
Thanks for coming by Reflections. I'll return the favor.
@ Brian-I'm a child of divorce, but watching my children go through as the parent is a hundred times worse.
Hi Dustus. Honest is the only way I know how to write. Thanks for the comment.
Morning Claudia (my morning). You always get me. That is exactly how I felt when I wrote this.
This is powerful -- brings back memories of when my daughter's father and I separated.
Beautifully written -- painfully true.
Thanks Louise. I thought it was only mine. Turns out a very universal pain.
Beautifully written ..about heart wrenching pain, the way you presented it makes it very real for the reader something easy to relate too ...I hope it helps if it needs to with your pain. Thank you
Thanks Kez. Poetry is how I deal with all my emotions.
raw and powerful, sun will rise tomorrow, life does go one. Emotional write hun
Greetings Shan... it always does.
Thank you. This was stunning... so much emotion conveyed with your words and a simple photo. Well done.
Thank you Rob. I appreciate you commenting. I wrote another for your picture in the comments box over there. You definitely brought back some memories for me.
The juxtaposition of the superficial and the real -- you've captured in one poem about 99 percent of human conversations. Good one.
That was wonderful. sad and so true for some people.
Hi Glynn. I'm glad you like it.
Thank you Leah. Many yes, I think divorce is 50-55%, cancer is at 33% and financial hardship... can't hazard a guess.
ralwus 2 years ago
oh what sorrow it is. makes me cry it does as I recall mine also. I just about died. Take care dear and cry yer eyes out til it's all gone. This too shall pass.