Your Poem
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I could be swept up and drown in this intensity
But that would belie its antiquity
The truth lies not in the frenzy of the flesh
But in the gentle gaze of your lover’s eyes
I do not wish to be the air you breathe
Instead the smile when you hear a song
Nor the answer to your every wish
But a catalyst to new visions and dreams
I care not to be the stars in your sky
Rather the unfathomable spaces in between
I have no desire to be your world
Only the sweetest moment in your day
And I will not grasp in longing desperation
But hold your love lightly in my hand for another
Lifetime
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What a fun comment! Thanks Dohn.
Such a divine expression. To be at the pure essence of connection! Love it, Randy! :)
Thanks Invictus. That's the goal I think.
nie goal to have.... nice poem
Thanks for dropping by Brenda.
Wonderful specially the "unfathomable spaces" which I pondered and thought off! I enjoyed the vastness of love in this poem. Hurray RB.
I only wish I could be so deep and mysterious. Thanks for your lovely comment Shamel.
Ahh, what lucky man is this to have receive the admiration and focus of such talent? Well written and profound, I love this.
Thanks Trooper, I'm glad you "love" this. :) I've missed your comments.
love the poem...beautiful thoughts and inspiration to those who know how to love.
Thanks Gwennie. And maybe a heads up to those who need to relax into it?
I like the conciseness with which you split the hairs of love's meaningful significance...
It may be hairs to you, but a world of difference to me. Thank you so much for your comment. I look forward to more of your insights.
Very beautiful, Randy. I especially like the concept of "...holding love lightly..." Thanks for a lovely read.
Thank you so much alekhouse. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Fantastic! My very thoughts on finding the "equal partner". Someone with whom the inspiration and inspiring comes together. Excellent!
Single female seeks inspiring male who seeks to be inspired... I'm sure he's out there Candie.
Thanks Randy! I shall keep the porch light on!!
Randy, your writing is always curious, a lesson of learning and desire. Very well done Randy. (The guy in the pic is hawt)!
Curious, am I? I'd hate to predictable :) Oh and the guy in the pic is the same "hawt" guy in What I Want, Adonis Mine, Real Live Boy, and Spirit of the Man. Needless to say my favorite photographer.
Beautiful and a complete contrast to your name, thank God.
*giggle* Don't like my name huh? Thanks for reading Katy. :)
You are the Poet
I the words
Love the thought between
Now who's the poet.
You have captured the pure essence of love. Never consuming, at times confusing, never completed. Well done!
Ah, thanks. I think you get me Carson.
Which brings to mind...does love not require to be loved back? Ahh love love love... thanks for sharing your lovely sentiments :D
It is not required Cris, just makes for a better love story. :)
I love it. One of the best I have read.
Wow Joy, thanks a bunch.
That is some poem. thanks for sharing. Loved it a lot.
I'm a poet too. Some of my hubs/ are poems. Plus I have a book of love poems DAWN'S KISS just came out. KNOW all about the "INTENSITY" THING GOING ON. cheers michael
Thanks for stopping by Mike. I'll have to check out some of your poetry. Cheers to you!
It highlights a different aspect of romantic love, and that's what makes it good.
Well Philip, I am glad you think so. :)
Great poem.
Thank you BIjja, I'm glad you like it.
Beautiful poem, Randy. It was the sweetest moment in my day. Loved it! :) I don't want to be anybody's world, either. Or the ruler of their world. Can't tell you how many things this poem reminded me of. Past relationships and all that.
Oh I'm glad it struck a chord with you Q. I haven't written many love poems but this certainly qualifies.
you seem to be coming to the attention of many once again, i did not google you, ..... this is strange, second third time around, it takes ona a life of its own.
I'm sad so many of my old friends are gone or have entered into the money wing of HP where I seldom tread. There are new talents to be found here now though, and I have unearthed some dandies :)
dandies, that is a new word to me. Maybe i will stalk you and find some new talents, could really do with a little a muse ment
holding love lightly in hand is a great image
Hi Claudia. Its a good goal to have I think.
That was really awesome. Love every line of this poem.
Thanks Leah!
Wow, love the intensity of each word and how it fills each sentence too, beautiful!
i much like the thought of holding love lightly in hands because it's something so fragile and needs tender care - beautiful poem randy
hey - just saw that i made almost the same comment two weeks ago...i read too many poems to remember them all but i think it's funny that exactly the same lines touched me again..
You've captured well, what love should and should not be. I envy your pute insights into a gray clouded truth :)
Monty / bummy
nice...i like it...and your choices...the spaces in between the stars and the smile at a heard song...i would like to be those as well...perhps not as fleeting...
Hi Randy -
This is my first time reading this, or anything of yours. I like the distinctions you make. We should all aspire to love this way.
You express undying love in a few lines, I could not express more in a full book.
One of the truly great poems I have had the pleasure of reading.
I feel the deep sense of love contained in your words. Each one of us has our own way of expressing love.
You've penned it most beautifully here.
Thank you for sharing.
I've often thought about writing a poem for someone special. Mostly end up writing for my kids lol, you've captured the rapture here, excuse the pun as we're meant to be ascending tomorrow, or descending as the case in point may be!
Beautiful poem!
What kool sentiments. Lovely luv post!!!
This expresses the real meaning of love...understanding that we are meant to challenge one another to grow.
Thank you Saiqa, nice to meet you.
Welcome back Claudia. Yea I noticed; good to be consistent.
Monty thank you for that sweet comment.
This poem reminds me of how possessing people get for their loved ones, not that your poem is about it, instead it is just the opposite.
Such a free expression, not being the space, but the medium.
Hi Brian. I'm glad you like my version of what should be.
Thanks for coming by Mary. I'm glad you decided to read me.
Wow Tino what a wonderful comment. Thank you.
Hello Andy. Thanks for coming by my hub. I appreciate your feedback.
My boyfriend and I were just discussing the rapture, then read your comment. lol. Well
guess I'll see ya in the here after Shan.
Thank you Ayala.
Greetings Henry; thanks.
Victoria, yes I agree we should at least encourage growth.
ALIVE aLwaYs, Thank you for comment. Possessing seems at odds with loving.
love is the combination of sadness, joy, twists and turns of emotional struggles.
divine sentiments.
Greetings,
How is your day?
Please share your poetry with JP potluck today,
Have fun!
Love your talent, as always, appreciate your support.
Old poems or poems unrelated to our theme are all welcome!
xoxox
Hi Jingle. Thanks for coming by.
"Your Poem" is a beautiful poem.
Interesting choice. A lover of love poems perhaps?
I wish I could send your poem to every one and any one I have ever loved. It is every thing any true lover would ever wish to say.
That is very sweet to say. And I am glad you have spread your love to many. :)
This poem is amazingly beautiful! I love the delicate manner of your words.
Thank you for coming by Mamadrama. I'm glad you liked it.
dohn121 Level 3 Commenter 2 years ago
I really enjoy the significantly insignificant role you play in this lucky guy's life. Amazing. Love it Randy B!